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Hook- Xstatic KiD
Verse 1- Xstatic KiD
Verse 2- Open
Verse 3- Open
I'll do verse 2 or 3, choose which one you want to do, il do the other
Hook-
I stay So fresh, n i look so Clean,
n il rip a niga up like i was wolverine,
I stay So fly, n i look so Clean,
i got that x man, you can call me wolverine,
I stay So fresh, n i look so Clean,
im fresher then the fresh prince of belaire,
I stay So fly, n i look so Clean,
you can call me Mr clean, im gona be a millionaire
Verse 1
Just like spiderman i be fuck with that mary jane,
youngsta that be flipin boats like a hurricane,
you already know the name, homie they call me xstatic,
tryn to get to the top, like a fuckin attic,
im still fly and, i dont even have wings,
homie i stay on da grind, just doin mah thing,
im still fly like a rocket ship goin into space,
doin my dirt slick, hopin i never catch a case,
time is money so, i have no time to waste,
out here hustlin, cuz im on that paper chase,
until da day i decease, mah skill will increase,
n ima be a Millionaire before i rest in peace,
you're wack because you suck at rapping. if you need more detail.. you're lyrics are weak and I lose interest quickly from the way you sound on the mic
tell me which verse you wana do..., ill do the other
Verse 2 or 3
i spit on the mic, like it was a spitoon,
dreamin to be a star that shine bright like a full moon,
dreamin to be a tycoon, thats strong as a typhoon,
im a one man platoon, that will pop you like a ballon,
im unfadeable not even a washer can fade me,
im untradable im more valuable then a mvp.
im so fly gravity, doesnt apply to me,
liven thru these hard times, got me writin tight rhymes,
im fresh out of juvy, livin life like im in a movie,
got a letter in the mail, from a homie thats in jail,
got me all sad waitin for the day that you get released,
i got yo back homie, until the day that im deceased,
You might need to read this ... OVER AND OVER AGAIN!
Quote:
Originally Posted by sooshe
1. annunciate. make it so the listener doesn't have to read your lyrics to know what you're saying. i found myself having to actually read your lyrics to figure out half of the recording.
2. ride the beat. i have to disagree to a large degree with razz, where he says your flow was "on-point". you've gotta refrain from trying to hold out syllables to finish out a phrase, and you've gotta stop rushing the other parts to fit them into the bar. condense your syllable use.
3. don't be ignorant. too many times your lyrics were very immature and "middleschoolish". you tend to talk a bit much about moms, which is only SPURATICALLY funny. can't keep hella bars talking about a momma. it gets old and immature.
4. deliver. where a lot of your lyrical contact, your delivery has to make up for it. unfortunately, like i mentioned in "This Arab's Funny", your voice sounds dead. even when you get excited and amped up, your delivery doesn't change much. there's no variety in tones. that's actually a VERY important role in making a track.
5. verify. understand what you're dealing with. if you're gonna study, play it safe and study every one of your own lines to make sure anything you try to use against a person is accurate and true. a lot of the lines you used about my mom made no sense to an intelligent listener, and the more you added, the more naive you seemed. sushi is not raw fish. it's classified as seaweed & rice with any kind of filling. sashimi is raw fish.
6. reality. don't get so bigheaded. when you see all the votes moving in the same direction from the get go, you know there's a sign. READ THE SIGN! you're not as good as you think you are. you need to stop thinkin you're the best all the time. If you keep doing that, how is there a chance to move up in the spectrum of things? you've gotta know when your limit is, and you've to know that there's always room to improve.
7. take critism. when people critique, don't flip out. if you're gonna get butthurt about someone with criticism, you shouldn't be making music.
8.be on time. that speaks for itself.
And if you can't excel with these tips, guess what?
YOU'RE WACK AND IT'S YOUR FAULT!!
A Philosophical Half
A Verified Third
A Quarter of AR's Slaughter
Last edited by CoMcClaine : 05-31-2009 at 02:25 PM.
yea dude some words I need to look at the lyrics to understand.. now U might say Im a hypocrite cuz I got that sometimes with my tracks.. The difference is my tacks contains distorted singing and screaming vocals so it dont always gta be 100% clear cuz thas the effect of rap rock.. The dirrty loud aggresive sound is what makes the genre
But when you doin rap..you gotta be clear at alll times..
This song is aight.. has neone asked to join the collab?? ppl hatin on ya mayne I dont think u the worst..
Yess you sound like a rook, but yer songs aint horrfic.. Its jus yo swag, how u present yourself to ppl got em trippn.
For ex: How the fuck do you get over 100 views overnight here... Ya drop a track here in audio session all a sudden ur like the most viewed while there are obviously more talented rappers droppin here who worked 8 times harder on their tracks than you did.
Id have to tag every thread in this site to get the number of replies that u get. Well Im over exagerratn a lil. Still jus bein real..
keep workin at it tho,, hopefully youll drop somethin hot in the future.
i thought it was gonna be a em beat haha butcho the track sounds better than what you put out a couple months ago, just think you should work on ur lyric game n controlling the bars. but other than that keep doing ur thing n soak up the advice.
